Greetings,
I thought this short story was lost for the longest time. For the last couple of years, I tried to find it but couldn't figure out where I might have saved it. I finally stumbled upon it on an old flash drive a few weeks ago.
The story was the result of a critique and challenge I received from one of my early short story groups. An individual within the group complained that the magical system in my stories was too simplistic. They felt using magic needed to be more difficult and costly to use. So, they challenged me to come up with such a system. So, when the next week's prompt was "Discovery", I wrote the following story. It is probably the darkest of any story I can remember writing. I hope you enjoy it and I'd love to get feedback!
The story was the result of a critique and challenge I received from one of my early short story groups. An individual within the group complained that the magical system in my stories was too simplistic. They felt using magic needed to be more difficult and costly to use. So, they challenged me to come up with such a system. So, when the next week's prompt was "Discovery", I wrote the following story. It is probably the darkest of any story I can remember writing. I hope you enjoy it and I'd love to get feedback!
Thanks,
James
Dark Discovery
by James J Meadows III
Gladia
smiled as she gazed at the beautiful bonsai tree basking in the sunlight
flowing through her bedroom window. The lush leaves glittered cheerfully before
her eyes, tender emerald friends sending soft thank yous for the refreshing
water she had just given them. Beside the bonsai, African violets
rested on her window seal, their purple blossoms shining like amethysts plucked
from the jewels of Solomon himself. Next
to them lay the pink and yellow hibiscus. Beside it stood her Oxalis.
Everything
had its place in her bedroom. It was like a mini-arboretum housing her
botanical family. She nurtured them, sang to them, and took delight in the
growth of each new stem and the bloom of each new flower. She even gave them
names.
They were not her only family, either. On a dresser nearby, her
white hamster, Noah, rattled merrily away on its wheel. In a separate cage, her
guinea pigs, Fluff and Puff, munched happily on their food while her beagle,
Patches, slept at her feet. She loved her family.
Gladia loved her real
family too. The problem was, they weren’t around as much. Her mother was a
district manager of a chain of stores and spent much of her time traveling
around the state. Her father was a lawyer and, though he did his best to feed
her and show her attention, his work often left him locked in his room, rifling
through important documents and typing long legal discourses, like he was
today. It was a hard life for a ten-year-old. Fortunately, she had her other
family to keep her company. Her plants and pets were always there for her.
She turned her gaze away
from the plants and, with a deep sense of dread, her eyes fell upon her desk
and the homework awaiting her. She couldn’t afford to distract herself from it
forever or else she would fail her classes. That would certainly get her
parent’s attention and not in the way she wanted. On the other hand, if she got
straight A’s, her parents would buy her another plant or maybe even another
animal to keep her company through the lonely days. She picked up her pencil
and looked at the first question on the printout before her.
“Margaret has a chocolate
fountain with 1 gallon of chocolate. It takes 2 ounces of chocolate to coat a
strawberry. If Margaret coats 16 strawberries, how many ounces of chocolate are
left?”
Gladia put her pencil to
her lips, thinking back to the previous day’s lesson. If she remembered
correctly - which, as one of the top students in her grade, she usually did - a
gallon was 128 ounces. If she dipped sixteen strawberries into a gallon of
chocolate and each strawberry took away 2 ounces what would she have? A really
tasty treat, she thought, smiling in spite of herself. Cherries would be even
tastier. She liked cherries much better than strawberries, although she
imagined they would be harder to dip in a chocolate fountain.
She had only seen a
chocolate fountain once, during one of her father’s business lunches. It didn’t
have cherries, so she didn’t know for sure. She would love to find out, though.
She stared ahead at the empty space above her desk fantasizing about a
chocolate fountain. In her mind, she could smell the fragrance of chocolate
wafting in the air above her, could hear the sounds of running chocolate
flowing into the pool of brown paradise at the bottom, and almost see the
chocolate rolling like a stream from the top of the mighty tower. She reached
her hands out with a childish playfulness, preparing to run them beneath the
waterfall of molten sweetness and to lick every delightful drop from each
solitary finger.
As she held her hands in
front of her, she noticed a slight tingling sensation in her palms. Staring
ahead, she realized, to her amazement, that she really could see the fountain
sitting before her. It was like a strange ghostly mirage growing more solid
with each passing second. The tingling in her hands grew faster and a strong
wind whipped through the room shaking her plants furiously. She heard the sound
of the dog whining and panicked squeals coming from the excited guinea pigs. Scared,
she yanked her hands away.
The vision faded, the
tingling stopped, and the wind vanished, leaving her plants still again. She
gasped for air, her heart beating feverishly in her chest. She looked around
the room. Her dog was on his feet, looking at her with startled agitation. The
hamster was off the wheel, his nose sniffing the air in the same manner as the
guinea pigs, who had abandoned their food. She didn’t know what had just
happened. It was like her desire for the fountain made one start to appear. The
experience was strange and terrifying, yet exhilarating at the same time. She
longed to try again.
She stared above her desk,
willing the fountain to reappear. Nothing happened. She thought back to what
she was doing the first time it appeared. She recalled carefully imagining
every detail of the fountain. She tried this, focusing on the smell of the
chocolate, on the sound of its fluids running down the sides, and the images of
its savory goodness flowing like a river before her. Still, nothing happened. Then
she remembered the sensation in her hands. Maintaining her vision of the
fountain and the intensity of her visualization, she extended her arms in front
of her with an all-consuming thirst for the fountain to return.
The strange tingling
returned to her fingers. Within seconds, the wind arose again within the room,
shaking her plants with the fury of a hurricane. The dog whined
loudly. The hamsters and guinea pigs scurried around their cages frantically and
Gladia let out a laugh of triumph. The fountain reappeared before her,
chocolate oozing from its crown-like lava erupting from a volcano. It was a
ghostly image at first, growing darker, clearer, and more substantial as the
wind picked up and the tingling in her hands turned into a red hot blaze
resembling frost-bitten skin plunged into warm water. Lost within the depth of
her excitement, Gladia felt no pain.
The vision grew steadier
and steadier until she gazed in amazement and delight at the newly formed
fountain sending ripples of creamy chocolate cascading down its edges with a
splendor befitting Niagara. She remembered her homework. She looked down at the
blank worksheet, longing for her homework to be finished, visualizing words and
answers taking shake upon the page.
Burning sensations scorched
her hands like the fires of Nebuchadnezzar, so intense they turned the skin a
violet shade more vibrant than the flowers on her window seal. The wind whipped through
the room, almost lifting her into the air and stirring her blond hair into a
furious swirling mass. Somewhere in the distance, she heard her dog howling
with terror yet she paid it no might. Like a drunk intoxicated by the incredible
sensations sweeping her body, she threw her head back and roared with
unrestrained laughter.
Words appeared on the pages
before her. One letter appeared, followed by another, followed by another. Numbers
and lines manifested across the once-blank surface like invisible ink revealed
by the heat rising from a smoking stove. Pages flipped, as though they were coins tossed
through the air by invisible hands, and the writing scrolled faster and faster
until the entire packet was complete.
Gladia lowered her arms. The
wind stopped. The tingling sensation in her hands died down to a dull throb and
the strange euphoria gave way to clear thought. Everything was still. Her
breaths came in sharp gasps and her heart pounded from the intensity of the
moment.
A chocolate fountain towered
above her in breathless grandeur, more glorious than the Eiffel Tower, spouting
its endless sugary essence as an offering to her palate. Beside it rested her
completed homework. She examined the front and back of each page. Every
question was solved and each equation was drawn out in flawless detail per the
teacher’s specifications.
In between these two
masterpieces, lay a small plate filled with cherries. Heart pounding, she
grabbed one and held it into the chocolate. The rich milky-brown liquid coated
the red orb with thick layers of tasty decadence. She stuffed the cherry inside
her mouth, savoring the tart flavor blending with the bitter chocolate taste.
Her eyes closed in ecstasy and a sound of sweet pleasure escaped her lips. She
sighed and opened her eyes, beaming with joy.
“It worked,” she said
excitedly. “Patches, look what I did.”
She turned to her dog. Her
countenance fell instantly and the excitement waned like the light of a failing
moon. The beagle lay on his side, his eyes staring blankly ahead of him, his
chest still and devoid of movement.
“Patches?” she said. Her
voice cracked as the realization set in. She fell to her knees beside the dog,
shaking him anxiously, hoping he was playing some silly game and would spring
to his feet. His body was as limp as a rag doll. Patches was dead.
Tears filled her eyes. She
shook him harder, crying, “Patches, Patches” over and over as though her
desperate pleas could force life back into his body. At last, she buried
her head in her hands. She turned toward the window where light flowed into the
room.
“Dear God, please don’t let
him be dead,” she wailed, gazing into the light. It was then that she saw her
plants. Their once vibrant leaves were crinkled and dried like charcoal and
their former flowers drooped over the side in withered despair. Her bonsai, her
hibiscus, the African violets, they were all dead.
Gladia stood up, backing
away from the plants and the dog, backing away from the fountain and the solved
homework. Her mouth fell open. Her lips moved in wordless agitation as she
pressed herself against the wall, shaking her head, trying to escape the
nightmare she found herself trapped inside. She turned toward the cages. The
sight was no better. Her hamster lay on its side while empty sockets glared
where guinea pig eyes once rested.
She had killed them. She
had killed her plants. She had killed her pets. She had killed her adopted
family; all for the sake of some chocolate and homework. This couldn’t be
possible. They couldn’t be dead. They mustn’t be dead. It had to be some
horrible dream.
“Daddy!” she screamed. Turning
on her heels, she raced out the door, leaped down the stairs, and charged toward
her parent’s room, still shouting for her dad. No voice responded to her cry.